Okay, um, Mark? What the fuck?
I feel dirty after reading this. This isn't a game, this is a business proposal.
REVIEWER NAME: Joshua BishopRoby
1) CREATIVE AND EFFECTIVE INCORPORATION OF RULES (1-10): 3
Feedback: Team, yes. Law, not really. Actor, hardly at all. The "time constraint" has the players doing more in the intervening two weeks than in the two six-hour sessions.
2) CLARITY (1-10): 7
Feedback: Written decently well, and certainly gets its point across. Repeatedly.
3) COMPLETENESS (1-10): 1
Feedback: The complete lack of any game mechanics whatsoever did not impress me.
4) ESTIMATED EFFECTIVENESS IN PLAY (1-10): 1
Feedback: You cannot play this. You might be able to sort of use this as a guideline for setting up your own e-business, but... that's not really the same thing, is it?
5) SWING VOTE (1-10): 1
Final Feedback: I am seriously annoyed that I read this entire document.
TOTAL SCORE (add items 1 through 5, above): 13