REVIEWER NAME: Dave Michael
1) CREATIVE AND EFFECTIVE INCORPORATION OF RULES (1-10): 6
Feedback:
Well, I noticed you used all of the ingredients. The time line was
used well. But no one ingredient was used overly well and some seem
tacked on at the last minute.
2) CLARITY (1-10): 4
Feedback:
The editing is good. It was readable in that sense. But there is a
lot of shorthand going on here. It references the Signature RPG, which
is not freely availble. So, a lot of the possible clarity might have
been lost on me. Also, there is a glaring error in that the
rock/paper/scissors description has an error, apparently Stand Fast!
is unbeatable.
3) COMPLETENESS (1-10): 4
Feedback:
This would need a LOT of work to get published. You need to
reproduce the pertanent rules from Signature in the document. Edit,
playtest and add some examples and you might be close.
4) ESTIMATED EFFECTIVENESS IN PLAY (1-10): 3
Feedback:
Although there is descriptions of narration in the rules, the game
itself is not very conducive to roleplaying. The rules seems to focus
more on the tactical combat and less on roleplaying
5) SWING VOTE (1-10): 5
Final Feedback:
I think its great that you incorporated all.of the ingredients. And
I feel like there is the core of a really great game in here. But, I
think it needs some owrk before it will be fully playable. Good start
man!
TOTAL SCORE (add items 1 through 5, above): 22