REVIEWER NAME: Dave Michael
1) CREATIVE AND EFFECTIVE INCORPORATION OF RULES (1-10): 9
Feedback:
The ingredients and time limit were used directly, not danced around
or hinted at. I coldn;t give you a 10, since you cold have been a
little more creative, but you did do quite a Good job!
2) CLARITY (1-10): 6
Feedback:
The rules are very dry and poorly written. However, there are plenty
of examples, so it is kind of a wash. I think if you work on the
wording of the conflict resolution rules and jazz up the text a little
to reflect how much you like this game, it will be a good game.
3) COMPLETENESS (1-10): 6
Feedback:
The examples are good. The starting of the next session and the
muddled descriptions of the conflict resolution system demand a lower
score though.
4) ESTIMATED EFFECTIVENESS IN PLAY (1-10): 5
Feedback:
I think it is great that you went with conflict resolution on a game
that is so obviously about telling a good story. But, the way the
conflict resolution is written, it cripples the emphasis on narrative
before it is even narrated. You have a conflict starting and then
immediately, the players are required to figure out the end of the
conflict and argue their idea.
5) SWING VOTE (1-10): 2
Final Feedback:
Well, I cannot say I am too impressed. The rules are copied from
another game (almost verbatim apparently), the conflict resolution is
convoluted and unnecessarily complex, and the writing is so dry I had
to put it down several times and go do something else to build up
enough interest to finish this review.
I am sorry for the bad review and harsh criticism. I feel that if
you do a good re-write, this will actually be a good game though, so
keep it up!
TOTAL SCORE (add items 1 through 5, above): 28