Disgenesia (Cyberpunk entry)

[maledictus]

You're making me blush!

I've been having some issues with the translation of the atributes:
Rudeza: Have no problem with this, this could be literally translated as Rudeness. It measures the muscles and strenght of the character.
Astucia: Wich could be translated as Cleverness, Cunning or Wits. It's how smart and charm the character is.
Maña: Could be translated as Adroitness or Nimbleness. This atribute measures the coordination and ease in using hands, it's like dexterity.

I don't want lot of -nessism (Rudeness, Cleverness, Adroitness). Do you have any suggestion, specially for Maña? Maybe it won't really matter, just wondering if you have any good suggestion.

[Thought]

Actually, if I might be so bold, might I suggest not translating them? For an English-speaking audience, translate the definitions of those words, but I think you could leave the names as-is. Rudeza, Astucia, and Maña seem quite nice (though I suppose transliteration/transcription might be a good idea; few English-speakers seem to do well with accent marks and the sort, so Maña would probably be pronounced as Mana, and that will just cause no end of confusion).

Just a transliterated,

Thought

[SheikhJahbooty]

Or just leave off the -ness

Rude - getting things done by physical force
Astute - noticing, remembering, and figuring things out
Manual - getting things done through physical finesse and manual dexterity

Something like that.

[misterecho]

I think for Rudeness, brash or front may work well.

[Rob Lang]

I'd leave of the 'nesses', and I like 'Front' as an attribute.

"Got more front than Brighton Beach!"*

*Southern England joke, insert anywhere that has a particularly long Beach front.

[maledictus]

I decided to use Rude, Clever and Adroit. Thanks for all your suggestions.

I just finished to write the Game Master section, now I only have to add the Supportinng Cast chapter and the Equipment appendix and I'm done with writing!

[misterecho]

then you can start on your second entry!

[maledictus]

Another entry I don't know if I could have the time, but I would really like to write another setting.

I've been thinking in a fantasypunk setting, were goblins discovered a magic metal and developed new technology with it that allow them to conquer the world and dominate the other races.

[misterecho]

You should check out



and



Both by 1km1kt regulars, you may find them useful on your next project

[maledictus]

I can't believe it, I have finished writing. I need to finish the layout and cover, but so far the game is 26 pages long. There is still plenty of time and I haven't reached the page limit, so I will add some plot ideas and a short story (or comic)-

If after this I still have time, I would think in write another setting.