Unleashed! Adventures in the 41st Millennium, Second Edition

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I really like the simplicity of the rules in Dungeon Squad, a great game, indeed! I'll check Unleashed.

[Chainsaw Aardvark]

I must congratulate you - getting to the second edition is hard.

At times it can be really hard to see what needs to be changed, to understand why people are confused by a game. After writing them and editing - you have probably gone over the rules several dozen times, and they make perfect sense to you.

This is a nice looking document, and well illustrated (though copyright issues might be an issue of concern) and the rules make internal sense.

If you don't mind the suggestion, there are two things you could do to make the game a lot easier to use. Both have to do with the documents layout - your writing is clear, but finding elements is not.

The first would be to redo your headings and subheadings. A single line of bold type doesn't really stand out - use a different font and a larger size to really make everything clear. (Underline and centering however, don't really help)

My second request is a bit more involved, but could you please split this up into more coherent chapters? I think it would help if character creation was was more of a summary ("Pick a race/profession, assign stats, buy equipment, choose spells) and then the options comprised separate chapters. Furthermore, use page breaks rather than continually running the columns. For example, the sisters of battle should have their own two or three pages with their abilities, weapon choices, some background/role playing info, and possible a graphic.

Keep up the good work!